Week #35 - Cameron

One morning I was going for a walk down near the river but my dog wanted to come too. He followed me all the way down to the dark cold river. But he got tired and he needed a drink. So he walked down to the river for a drink. But I said “no, don't go into the river.” But he couldn't hear me because he's a naughty dog. I jumped in after him to save him from the deep waters of the river. But I slipped over and broke my leg before I could get to the edge.

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  1. Oh goodness Cameron, what a series of unfortunate events!
    I don't think you needed to start your third sentence with 'But' What about this ...
    He was tiring and obviously thirsty, so tail wagging, he walked into the water and began to drink. What do you think?
    Thanks for sharing,
    Jackie (team 100WC)
    New Plymouth

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